Sabbath Eve in July
High waves
Lifeguard station black flag
By the waters edge
my chair sinks in the sand
as the waves wash
over me.
Family time on
Sabbath eve
Sun setting
Sea is calmed
Lemonade,Pizza
French fries, salad
Grateful
Poem
About a few weeks we went to the beach.
Almost a year ago I started a series and then got stuck. Happens! 10 paintings sitting waiting, asking to be finished. Well finally the time has come and I have started painting again in oils. This series involves using collage sections. For my collage I used tissue paper that was used to blot other paintings. Submitted this painting for critique on Cold Wax Academy. This critique will include peer critique as well as Jerry and Rebecca. I really doubt that it will be chosen for review because of the content, although the critique will be on the formal elements and not on content.
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Carol, glad this reached me despite the ongoing configuration challenges of your new mailer for your blog! What a gift to have poems—written by you!—now accompanying your posts. In “Sabbath Eve in July” the concrete palpable image of “by the water’s edge / my chair sinks in the sand” reached out and pulled me in with its accessible literal imagery and its open-ended figurative possibilities. So cool that you can submit your painting for critique on Cold Wax Academy. In that process do you submit paintings “cold,” so to speak, or do you ask specific questions when submitting for feedback?
Thank you for your heads up on the poem. This time the painting went as you said “cold”. No questions or descriptions. We will get a post with the ones selected so that we can form an opinion, analyze composition in order to join in discussion in the lesson. My last entry I had to analyze and state what changes I did and also ask questions. It did get into the review and got fairly good review and there were suggestions of small tweaks. (those were the painting of the sea).These coming months will be critiques of finished work. You would be surprised how much you learn from this process. I plan to finish the collage series in order to enter them all even with the difficult content. Thanks again for your feedback!
I’m so glad you posted this one. I believe the content IS important, especially here, and you have dramatically represented it in so many ways. Among them:
– tension between your 2 primary shapes that both oppose and encounter each other
– scribbly marks that “underline” and connect the relationship between those shapes
– similar marks that hover above the larger shape as though holding up threatening grey clouds
– menacing shadowy grey shape that seems to be emerging from behind the larger shape
– the use of red as symbolic parenthetical marks enclosing the two shapes
– well balanced variation in edges
– while colors are not somber, the overall shroud of greyness casts a mood over the whole surface
Brava!! Love to you and family.
Thank you for your in depth feedback. I think that the content came through intuitively and now looking back at their development I can see it more clearly. I am so depressed at the situation, I have this constant state of sadness and despair, so I guess my art reflects it. Again thank you! Love your photos of your small piece of paradise!
Air mail and cyber mail snarls… but you unraveled it! Yes!!!
Love your poetry! I am so thrilled to see the oils return! And this piece is glorious, content included. It hit me deeply.❤️
Thanks so much for your comments! Don’t know how long that poetry bit will continue. I am very difficult with expressing my self with words, even in daily conversation. Sometimes the two languages get mixed. That should be my only problem! Glad that you liked my work. Not what you would call a pretty picture!
היי שיר מקסים אהבתי גם את הציור
Thanks Rutie. Appreciate your looking and reading!
זמן משפחתי נהדר, כמו תמיד. זכינו ♥
Yes, we are all winners!
Such a moody piece. Maybe that is not the right word. It sets a tone, creates a mood instantly. I love the built up textures, and the marks. There is tension. Silence. And that red just screams out. I sat looking (at the large view) for some time. I love the imagery you created with your poem as well. Brachot!
Thanks so much for your feedback. So glad that you felt the tone, mood and tension of the piece.
Glad you felt the imagery in the small poem, I am very new to this type of expression. Hoping all is well with you! Brachot!